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You're on the right track, but this sounds more like a headline than a sentence. Make it past tense ("struck") -- use present tense for broadcast news (and some features).
ReplyDeleteRevised: An earthquake with a preliminary magnitude of 2.2 shook the foothills off Alum Rock Falls Road (be sure to get the name right!) early Tuesday morning ....
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