1. He hopes to make a billion dollars by the time he is forty-years old. He already figures depending on current stick prices, his net worth is between two and three billion.
2. Every since she joined the U.S. Navy on June 15, 2005, she has been vocal proponent of naval practices and policies.
3. It was a one-sided game, and he was a poor loser. After losing the play off, when his ball went out of bounds, he made an off-color remark that could be heard in the stands.
4. Hundreds of people attended Sunday's race to watch seventy-five top bicyclists pedal across the finish line.
5. Every summer the Jones' and the Kinneys' pore over travel-brochures, planning their winter trip together. This year they are hoping to vacation in Panama City.
6. The five-year-old girl was born in Canton, Ohio but she now lives in Fremont, California.
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1) Review AP style for "numbers" and the "millions/billions" entry. (-3)
ReplyDelete2) Good!
3) the playoff (-1)
4) 75 (-1)
5) Review plurals vs. possessives for names (-1). Which Panama City? There's more than one. (-1) You've added two errors (Kinneys' and travel-brochures) - minus 1/2 point each. (-3 total)
6) Put a comma after Ohio. See AP style for ages and states. (-2)
8/20 - you need to spend more time with your AP Stylebook